Ursula LeGuin's website features a rejection letter for one of her first books.
The book is so endlessly complicated by details of reference and information, the interim legends become so much of a nuisance despite their relevance, that the very action of the story seems to be to become hopelessly bogged down and the book, eventually, unreadable.
... Much like your sentence, in fact.
It's really cool when Brilliant And Famous Writers like Ursula LeGuin and Neil Gaiman talk about their rejection letters. It makes it easier to shrug off rejection letters: Oh, they don't know any better. They'll be sorry later!